13 December, 2010

Crazy Holiday Blogfest

This post is part of Christine Danek's Crazy Holiday Blogfest!

Here's some information from her blog:

It could take place in Spring, Summer, Fall or Winter. It could be a scene from a WiP, a new piece you may have started, something totally random, but it should include a holiday (any one holiday, remember).

This is my (short--I managed to keep it only 264 words) entry:

Someone giggled.
   I frowned and turned to look behind me, but no one was there.
   They giggled again—this time I was fairly certain those giggles were female.
   “Kylie!” I said loudly.
   She squealed and ran out from behind the door. “Taylor!” she cried, jumping up and down. I scooped her up with a roll of the eyes and a sigh—but hey, what was a guy to do when an adorable little monster begged to be picked up?
   “Do you think I’ll get valentines?”
   “Of course,” I said, tweaking her nose. She squealed again. “You’ll be the one who gets them all.”
   “Will you get any?”
   “I’m a guy. Guys don’t do things like that.”
   She pouted.
   I half-smiled. “Let’s go see what Mom’s up to, ‘kay?”
   “’Kay!” she cried, and jiggled in my arms. I wished she wouldn’t do that.
   “Taylor? Kylie?” Mom said from her bedroom.
   “MOMMY!” Kylie shrieked, and I put her down. Mom’s sickness was getting better these days—I smiled as she embraced Kylie and ruffled her curls. Then she gestured to me. I stepped onto the soft rug and went over to her bedside.
   “Breakfast, sweetheart,” Dad said from the doorway. He held a fancy tray in his hands, with cards from all of us next to the food.
   “All this?” Mom looked surprised. Dad nodded and kissed the top of her head. We’d all missed her while she’d been at the hospital—now that she was home, everyone wanted to be around her all the time.
   “Happy Valentine’s Day!” Kylie said happily.

-----The Golden Eagle


Summer Ross said...

Your entry is both very sweet with the little girl and cards, and sad at the same time because the mom is ill.. Thanks for posting! I enjoyed the read.

Holly Ruggiero said...

I really like the interaction between the little girl and the boy. Very nice short!

Sangu said...

This is such a sweet entry! Love how it's both feel-good and poignant at the same time :-)

Jules said...

I think it is a wonderful reminder of how simple things should/could be. Wonderful read :)
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

Lazy Girl said...

Ah how sweet. I loved reading that!! And Valentine's Day is one of my favorite holidays! Thanks for dropping by my blog. Figured I'd leave you a comment here just in case you weren't able to check back!

And yeah I'm an opera singer, Lyric Soprano! I see that you're a musician as well! Love the music on your blog. Just listened to the instrumental White Christmas! Woot!

Lah @ LazyGirl Reads

Laurel Garver said...

I loves me a nice sibling dynamic. The big brother is such a sweetie. I'd love to read more about how this family supports one another through mom's illness.

Pk Hrezo said...

oh it's so sweet and to the point.Great job!:)

Talli Roland said...

Aw, this is so sweet! I feel all smiley inside.

Anonymous said...

So sweet! You conveyed a lot in such a short span of time. Good job.

Crystal Cook said...

THis is great! I really enjoyed this, you have a knack for dialogue. :)

Carol Kilgore said...

Very nice. Bittersweet but loving.

N. R. Williams said...

I like big brother. Just the hint of Mom's illness lets us know that there is lots of tension. Nice entry.
N. R. Williams, fantasy author

Old Kitty said...

Lovely, lovely, lovely!!! I really enjoyed reading this - thank you!!! The family dynamics was just perfectly captured here! Well done you! Take care

Jen Chandler said...

Great interaction between brother and sister. You can tell he really cares for her and his mother. Nice job!


Arlee Bird said...

Is the mom going to be okay? Or is she suffering with a terminal illness? This could go either way.
Nice Valentine vignette.

Tossing It Out

Aleta said...

You made me smile and then want to cry. Very touching. This post has the sweetness of holidays, the giving and the loving and the missing, all in so few words.

Joanna St. James said...

This is so beautiful, I wanted to reach out and hug the mum, she has such a beautiful family

Meredith said...

Aw, what a good Valentine's Day! I hope the mother heals--I'm so invested in these characters already!

Robyn Campbell said...

Awww, how lovely. This is the type of family everyone wants to have. Love the portrait you painted of their life. You showed a lot in just a few words. SWEET! :)

beth said...

This was a really sweet story.

Karen Lange said...

Sweet and just the thing for a chilly winter day (at least in my part of the country:)

Thanks so much for stopping by my blog a while back for Stephen Tremp's Home and Away series. It's nice to meet you!

Have a great week,

roxy said...

This was a great snippet. Your characters pulled me right in. I enjoyed it a lot.

Hannah said...

This entry is very good. I was really captivated by the story. I found it very sweet and interesting. Nice writing!

Brenda Drake said...

Awwww, this is so sweet. I love the interplay with the brother and sister. He's such a good big brother. Loved it! :D

Lydia K said...

I love happy endings! What a fun entry. Great job!

Bobbye Terry said...

Very nice entry. Thanks for sharing it.
Bobbye aka Daryn Cross

Shelley said...

Awesome entry! I like the way you started it! :)

Jane Kennedy Sutton said...

Sweet happy family Valentine story. I hope mom completely recovered!

Colene Murphy said...

Awesome! What a nice entry!

Jessie said...

so descriptive and uplifting - nice story!

Mason Canyon said...

What a wonderful entry. I want to know more.

Thoughts in Progress

Madeleine said...

Awh that's really sweet. :O)

Francine Howarth said...


Cute tender scene and beautifully written.


Christine Danek said...

This was so sweet. Thanks for sharing and nicely written.
Thanks for participating. Hope you have a wonderful day!

gideon 86 said...

What a lovely story. Sensitive and sweet. I loved the pov. Guy don't give do this. Meanwhile the dad ....

Boys do learn as they grow into men. I least I hope so for their sakes.


Clarissa Draper said...

What a happy story! I'm glad you've shared it with us.

Susan Fields said...

Sweet! I really like your mc here - he sounds like a great brother!

Nicole Zoltack said...

The interaction between the siblings was precious, I loved it. :)

Ellie said...

Such a sweet and touching entry. You can sense the love and warmth the siblings have for each other and their mother. Beautiful.

Ellie Garratt

The Golden Eagle said...

Summer: You're welcome! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Holly: Thank you!

Sangu: Thanks, Sangu. :)

Jules: The world's a dark place--but there are still the bright spots.

Lazy Girl: I'm glad you like it!

You're welcome--I'm glad I found your blog!

I can't sing very well. I can keep a tune, and I'm not horrible, but my voice just isn't all that good at it.

Cool! Someone's actually listening to it. LOL.

Laurel: I've got story ideas out of this, now. It seems I can't write anything without wanting to turn it into a story!

Pk: Thank you!

Talli: I hope the feeling stays. :)

E. Elle: Thanks, Elle!

Crystal: I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Thank you!

The Golden Eagle said...

Carol: Thanks, Carol. I don't usually write scenes with this kind of emotion--it was an interesting change for me.

Nancy: Me, too--just after that short piece, I already want to know more about him.

Thank you!

Old Kitty: You're welcome!

Thanks--glad you enjoyed reading it!

Jen: Thanks, Jen!

Lee: Well, my idea when I was writing it was just a vague idea that she'd recover.

Thank you!

Aleta: One of my goals is to touch readers in some way--I want my writing to hold significance for the reader.

Joanna: Thanks, Joanna!

Meredith: I think she will. ;)

Robyn: Thank you! I'm glad you liked the entry!

Beth: Thanks, Beth--that means a lot to me.

The Golden Eagle said...

Karen: It's cold, here, too! Snow outside, down in the teens . . . or below zero, if you use Celsius.

You're welcome! It was a great post!

Roxy: Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed it. :)

Hannah: Thanks so much, Hannah!

Brenda: I love big brothers who aren't the stereotypical bully/bad boy--I didn't want Taylor ending up like that!

Lydia: Me, too.


Bobbye: You're welcome--I was happy to post for this blogfest!

Shelley: Thank you, Shelley! I wanted to start it in a fun kind of way. :)

Jane: I think she will! Especially with that kind of family!

Colene: Thanks! Glad you liked my entry!

Jessie: Thank you!

The Golden Eagle said...

Mason: Thank you, Mason!

I may continue this at some point, if it strikes me--I've got ideas, now that I've written it out!

Madeleine: Glad you thought so!

Francine: Thank you, Francine. :)

Christine: You're welcome!

This was a lot of fun, Christine! I hope you host another blogfest sometime soon!

Gideon: Thanks, Gideon!

Hopefully, yes.

Clarissa: You're welcome for it! :)

Susan: Thank you! I'm glad you like the MC--I do, too!

Nicole: Thanks!

Ellie: Thank you for that, Ellie. :)